Showing posts with label script. Show all posts
Showing posts with label script. Show all posts

Friday, 21 April 2017

Major Project Proposal

I mentioned in a previous post that for the major project I am going to create a piece that will fill some gaps in my portfolio and will be relevant work to show publishers  at conventions, with whom I would like to work. My main interests are horror, science fiction and superheroes when it come to genres. As I already have The Lost Legionnaire under my belt and have done freelance Science Fiction comics in the past I want this project to be about Superheroes. 

As such my main goals are:


  • To create and draw a contemporary Superhero story drawing on what I have learned from The Superhero Module specifically and in general the other research modules on the course. This will include all the elements I consider necessary to Superhero stories such as Coogan's definition of Mission, Powers, and Identity, Reynolds ideas of extra effort and Science as Magic and the contrast between ordinary and extraordinary, a political element and an overarching theme being explored in the story.
  • To include modern city environments, modern people, vehicles and technology as these things are currently lacking in my portfolio. I need to be able to show I can do these thing's effectively as well as just figure drawing or creatures. I think achieving this would result in my portfolio being quite complete.
  • To have a female protagonist. Partly because I am much more comfortable drawing males and it's something I need more practice drawing but also partly because in the past whenever I have written characters they have always been men and I would like to challenge myself to do something different.
  • To continue to experiment with page layouts and different ways of effectively communicating the story, again drawing on areas covered in the critical approaches module. I feel that previously I have focused a lot on simple effective visual narrative without really trying to do anything interesting. The storytelling is always number one but at the same time there are also multiple ways to do any one given panel or page. I liked a quote from Alan Moore talking about writing where he said he tried to never do the same thing the same way twice and was always looking for a new way to communicate the idea. During the production of The Lost Legionnaire this was helpful in forcing me to experiment with more illustrative pages - something I had always avoided maybe due to lack of confidence. I am really pleased with the results I got from The Lost Legionnaire  and want to continue exploring that aspect of my art with this major project.
The idea I have settled on will include time travel and nanotechnology induced superpowers vie DNA re sequencing with the narrative revolving around a team of enhanced people chasing a criminal through time from decades in the future to present day. 

Years ago I read an article about a time traveler who came to our time from an idealic future and while here for one month posted on message forums talking about the future and events to come. This idea, even though clearly an elaborate hoax really captured my imagination and I had always wanted to do some sort of comic around these ideas. 

I thought that combining this setting and idea with a Superhero story would be interesting to do as a Major Project.

I will be working on the script in the coming weeks. What I know now is that the story will be about Grief/Loss and will feature a team of 4 Superheros, much like the Fantastic Four really, doing battle against a Superman figure that has gone insane.  The majority of the story will take place in present day or the very near future (+2-3 years max). I think the main protagonist will be a girl on the superhero team although I don't want to sideline any of the other characters on the team either. This way I think I can achieve all the goals listed above. 

What I am unsure of at the moment is the length of the story. I would very much prefer to have it be a full story complete without the need for further work but the concern is how to achieve that in a number of pages that can be completed to the standard I am aiming for in 3 months considering I will be doing the whole production on my own. 

I have had some thoughts on how I will colour the piece in a simpler way to save time but hopefully still look good. 

For the penciling and inking style I was going to try and go for something contemporary in superhero comics but after chatting with Heather Antos and thinking more about what way I enjoy working I think I will go for what I did with The Lost Legionnaire but add more fine detail. What I did on the Lost Legionnaire had a very chunky feel to it in terms of the line work. I think I can get a similar appeal on this project but also make it looke more fitting as superhero artwork. 

Thursday, 24 November 2016

Script Update Fifth Draft

I'm toying with the idea of adding a page to the comic at the end. It'll totally change the tone of the story and potentially destroys the character arc but it feels better to me. I'll need to get some feedback.

Here it is :

PAGE 1 (5 panels)

PANEL 1
Long wide panel, close up of sandaled feet running on the ground.

CAPTION
I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.

CENTURION
Keep going! They’re right behind us!

PANEL 2
We focus on a small group of the romans breaking off from the main force. The are heading towards a forest.

CAPTION
Our forces were unable to break the Cimbrian defense and we fled...

FLAVIUS
This way! We’ll lose them in the woods!

Thursday, 29 September 2016

Script 4th Draft

PAGE 1 (5 panels)


PANEL 1
Long wide panel, close up of sandaled feet running on the ground.


CAPTION
I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.


CENTURION
Keep going! They’re right behind us!


PANEL 2
We focus on a small group of the romans breaking off from the main force. The are heading towards a forest.


CAPTION
Our forces were unable to break the Cimbrian defense and we fled...


FLAVIUS
This way! We’ll lose them in the woods!



Tuesday, 27 September 2016

Script 3rd Draft

Also gone is the boring hunting exposition page. It has become a caption on panel one of the next page. I'm down to 12 pages now which is good. I still feel I need to do something with the wandering the forest page so maybe there will be another draft but I need to think about it.

PAGE 1 (5 panels)


PANEL 1
Long wide panel, close up of sandaled feet running on the ground.


CAPTION
I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.


CENTURION
Keep going! They’re right behind us!


PANEL 2
We focus on a small group of the romans breaking off from the main force. The are heading towards a forest.


CAPTION
Our forces were unable to break the Cimbrian defense and we fled...


FLAVIUS
This way! We’ll lose them in the woods!

Script 2nd Draft

2nd Draft. The opening battle scene is gone. It works better to start with the chase sequence and it didn't add anything other than exposition. Some minor changes elsewhere. The centurion that survives at the end is now Crispus the guy who was going to kill Blasius on page 2.


PAGE 1 (5 panels)


PANEL 1
Long wide panel, close up of sandaled feet running on the ground.


CAPTION
I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.


CENTURION
Keep going! They’re right behind us!


PANEL 2
We focus on a small group of the romans breaking off from the main force. The are heading towards a forest.


CAPTION
Our forces were unable to break the Cimbrian defense and we fled...


FLAVIUS
This way! We’ll lose them in the woods!

Script 1st Draft

1st draft of the script. I'm fairly happy with it but there are a couple of sequences that were bothering me as I wrote it. 

PAGE 1 (4 Panels)


PANEL 1
Large panel to include the title/credits.
An epic battle between Roman Legionnaires and Germanic Cimbri warriors. Swords strike deep and limbs fly off as the warriors step over their fallen comrades to reach their next opponent


CAPTION
I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.


CAPTION
I remember the sick feeling in my gut, the mix of nerves, adrenaline and fear, as our legion, under the command of Consul Quintus Servilius Caepio, assaulted the camp of the migrating Germanic Army,  the Cimbri.


CAPTION
True Roman warriors fought for their lives that day.


PANEL 2
Smaller panel.
Shot of Blasius lying on the ground pretending to be dead as Barbarians run past him.


CAPTION
Whilst I, to my great shame, did my best to stay out of harm's way.

Plot

Here's how I broke the story down before writing the script:


Negative - Dishonour Positive Alive

Act 1
  • Scene 1 Negative Fighting/Fleeing/Terrified - Resting/Safe/Relieved Positive - 2 pages A battle is taking place between the Roman army and a barbarian army on the fringes of their territory. The battle has raged all day.  A cavalry charge from the barbarians finally turns the tide and we see the Romans being cut down and eventually routed. A small group of the soldiers break off from the main routing force and head towards a nearby forest for refuge. They are pursued by barbarian infantry. Inside the forest the soldiers find themselves still pursued. Silhouettes of the enemy infantry above them against the dusk sky at the edges of the forest but strangely they don’t seem to be entering deep in pursuit.. One of the romans spots a thick mist up ahead. The lead roman, an officer named Flavius orders the men into the mist to lose their pursuing  enemies. They pass through the mist and find themselves still in the forest when they emerge from the other side. There is a moment of respite.